day tripper

haha wow. This kinda sounds like my story that I have been posting on here. /: [Welcome to Miami] but whatever. It was neat. Just space it out more.

Rubix cube! haha Day Tripper

Okay, well hello first off and welcome to the site!(: Alright, first off, before I get into any details Imma get straight to the point: Your story needs work. It ...

Wew! Finally! A-ha. I've been working on this for a while now, I had a bit of writers block but I finally sat my butt down and said to myself: ...

When I first opened this, I contiplated on reading it. You need to space out you're paragraphs, and if you switch from scene to scene or to a different thought, ...

I've done a piece before where there's a character running. You aced it(: It was very nice, everything about it, the scenery, his thoughts. All too well. I loved the ...

That was good. Reall, I liked it. Though, I would suggest maybe putting your flashbacks in italics so that it doesn't confuse your readers(like it did with me, haha) and ...

Welcome to the last installment to "Bandages". I've had a huge amount of fun writing this, expanding my writing mind. But, every story must come to an end. After this, ...

Ahhh! You end it here? wait so the bet was true about Chad? BLAH I dont care, this was good. I really liked the series, it was very intreguing. You ...

To tell the truth, I wasn't completely into this. But I do like where it's going, but some things were just... I'm not sure, let's say 'Not me'. But, it ...

You are an amazing writer. All your chapters are planned out and that's a great thing. It's not like you write and then tap your finger and go okay now ...

Oh my goshh, that was a twist! Ahh finally something so original. Haha I like it. I really do. The only thing that confused me was the bar thing I ...

Bandages: Part Four Dustin scattered away, but I chased him down the hallway. “Dustin!” I shouted, ignoring all the glances from other students wallowing in the hallways. He made a ...

I really liked this. Like TNCowgirl stated, just remember the phrase: Fanboys it helps(: and yes, a little more work on puncuation and a tab more detail and this will ...

hah, then next chapter explains EVERYTHING. So hold tight(: